Outline
Thesis: Driving tired can be more dangerous than driving under the influence.
I. Problems with driving tired
A. driving ability is decreased
B. can't stay focused
C. dangerous
II. Dangers and facts about driving tired
A. Cause accidents
B. 100,000 crashes, 1,550 deaths, 71,000 injuries and $12.5 billion in monetary losses each year
III. Ways to prevent driving tired
A. exercises to wake up joints
B. good posture
C. diet, foods to avoid
conclusion: Driving tired can be a very dangerous to you and others, but there are ways to avoid falling asleep on the wheel.
I think you have a good start, but driving under the influence is part of your thesis statement, and is not included in your outline. You will need to include information on driving under the influence as well to be able to prove your thesis.
ReplyDeleteI was about ready to say what Kim did. Also, this is not a paper to inform or explain to your reader, it is a paper to persuade and argue. Therefore, you need to consider how your claim is really going to focus in on the persuasive portion and support your claim in general.
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